Two page story revision

My revised two page story is on the top and my original two page story is on the bottom. The first revision I did was changing the background to white instead of dark red. Doing my research through all of the magazines I did not find one that had a colored Two page story. They either had pictures in the story or a background color of something very light. I felt that a white background would make the pictures and writing stand out more. The next thing I did was section my writing. I shortened the instructions, and put them on one half of each page. On the left half of the first page I put the materials needed and a picture of the final product. I felt that when people opened the magazine to this page they would want to see a picture of what the final product would look like first. Then I started with the steps, in between some of the steps I put in a picture related to the nearest step. I felt that this would break up the page and not look as congested with words. I also added page numbers to each side of the pages, corresponding with my flat plan. Due to my shortening in the steps I felt I did not need to add "tips and  extra help". I made the steps more understanding and easy to read. I also shortened the list of materials. Some of the ones I originally listed were not necessary and did not need to be added.